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"As Jack realized that his arm had been severed, and was dropping to the floor with blood splaying everywhere, he briefly wished for the peaceful morning he had been enjoying just a few hours before. Then he screamed..."
In other words, you are starting it at the wrong point to build tension.
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Nice
If it's not broken, fix it until it is.
Everything makes sense in someone's mind.
Ya can't fix stupid.
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channel of his life.
"A little time, a little trouble, your better day"
Badfinger
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Looks like you started carefully then got a bit.. lazy? (Not the writing, the proof-reading): Para4: predictable; disciplined; Capitol (unless you mean capital city, when it - uhm - doesn't have a capital letter). Para 5: I this came in(??); handled.
Style-wise, "partly cloudy" sounds like a weather forecast, and doesn't really fit in with the sun dancing on the water. How do we see the water, anyway, when we're standing in a tree-lined avenue? "The old man...", "any other well-off old man", "winter-white hair" ... all give the impression of a rather elderly gent. It was jarring then to read "going off to the office". Men of the age you imply don't go off to the office. Just threw me as the mental picture you'd painted in my head was suddenly ripped up. Either leave the impression of age, and say something like "any other elderly gentleman surveying the spring morning", or don't make him out to be old and doddery.
Overall it feels a little bit clichéd, maybe rather flowery. Depends on your target market really and what the book is. Fine if this is a romance or a character portrait; probably not so great if it's an all-action thriller.
Finally, speaking as an Englishman, it comes as a surprise to learn the Speaker has a car with a heavily armoured door, a driver, an assistant, and three agents (where are they going to ride??), especially if he's just going off for a light breakfast and golf?? Our house Speaker is an MP and like other MPs might have a driver for official engagements, but otherwise drives his own car...
Going forward, not sure CodeProject's lounge is the best place to ask for advice. We have 14 million members and I guess a good few hundred are thinking about writing a novel. Join a writers' group where you'll get a more informed response and won't risk winding people up. Best of luck with it!
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Music wouldn't be the same without the likes of him.
RIP
"the debugger doesn't tell me anything because this code compiles just fine" - random QA comment
"Facebook is where you tell lies to your friends. Twitter is where you tell the truth to strangers." - chriselst
"I don't drink any more... then again, I don't drink any less." - Mike Mullikins uncle
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Goodness gracious!
RIP Killer.
If you can't laugh at yourself - ask me and I will do it for you.
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Aww c'mon... Rihanna isn't that bad.
(I thought she was pretty cool in Battleship)
Software Zen: delete this;
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Nears? I thought it was already done.
M.D.V.
If something has a solution... Why do we have to worry about?. If it has no solution... For what reason do we have to worry about?
Help me to understand what I'm saying, and I'll explain it better to you
Rating helpful answers is nice, but saying thanks can be even nicer.
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#Worldle #280 2/6 (100%)
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"A little time, a little trouble, your better day"
Badfinger
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...and haven't had an issue since.
(just to follow up on a previous post.)
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Our cable modem has 4 Ethernet ports. My and her desktops are connected to two of these ports via Ethernet cables. Other machines (laptops) connect via WiFi. This setup works like a dream!
Get me coffee and no one gets hurt!
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I had a similar issue with the Ethernet connection from my dock.
It turned the short network cable I was using bad and replacing it fixed all the issues I was having.
"Time flies like an arrow. Fruit flies like a banana."
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I use "ethernet over powerline" to connect devices I don't connect directly with a cable or wifi. That's been working fine for everything (e.g. streaming).
"Before entering on an understanding, I have meditated for a long time, and have foreseen what might happen. It is not genius which reveals to me suddenly, secretly, what I have to say or to do in a circumstance unexpected by other people; it is reflection, it is meditation." - Napoleon I
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Disclaimer: I'm not sure where to put this. It's not a programming question, but it is a technical question involving an interactive gadget, having to do with usability.
I've been trying to create a low power controller with an e-ink/e-paper display. Since they retain their image when the device is idle I can deep sleep the MCU and take just 10uA of power, waiting for a wakeup signal.
The trouble comes when you hit a button on the controller. I need to update a number you can increase or decrease by pressing the appropriate button. Even on my prototype device with super fast partial refresh the display updates terribly slowly relative to what is needed for this feature.
I'm not in a position where I can necessarily move away from e-paper. I am too far into the project and I don't have complete control over it anyway. There are e-paper displays, like those used for Nooks and Kindles that have virtually instant refresh rates but they are cost prohibitive for this application, and too large besides.
What I was thinking was I could give you an audible cue when you hit a button, and only update if you stop pressing the buttons for say, 2 seconds. That way you can rapidly click the numbers up and down. You won't get a visual cue right away, but at least you'll have audible feedback whenever you hit a button.
Does this seem too counterintuitive? Anyone have any other ideas?
To err is human. Fortune favors the monsters.
modified 28-Oct-22 6:59am.
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Your technical challenges are so much different from mine!
So putting anything to the display is slow, not just the numeric value? For example making a dot blink?
Is there a vibration capability like my Fitbit watch?
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Yes, putting anything on the display is slow, even a dot.
I could add vibration to the remotes. A beep would use less power, which is a win, but if vibration were to add significant value in terms of usability it would be worth it.
To err is human. Fortune favors the monsters.
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Is the device likely to be used in a noisy environment where your audible tone would be hard to hear?
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No. Or at least, I don't think it typically will.
To err is human. Fortune favors the monsters.
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honey the codewitch wrote: Does this seem too counterintuitive? Nope. A bit awkward, however.
But, in my opinion, there is no better alternative.
"In testa che avete, Signor di Ceprano?"
-- Rigoletto
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Or an LED you flash alongside the beep...
Or even a seven-seg display that just lights up for a while when the button is pressed.
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I like stormblades answer. some little light that lets them know you know and are doing something. Lots of people are hard of hearing. Also giving more than one indicator (both a vibration/beep and a light led flash) would probably be beneficial.
Just my .02
To err is human to really elephant it up you need a computer
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I like storm blade’s idea. A lot of ppl have hearing issues, so some simple visual feedback is a good idea. Probably better than audio as the client is already reading a display.
For the audio tone, it seems like you could
1. Leave the audio tone /LED active until the last refresh is done. Change pitch/volume/tune during different phases.
2. Initial beep, the final beep on last refresh.
3. What are the chances of simple spoken feedback? I know C64 had a decent spoken SAM engine in under 32kb, with a decent sound chip.
I am assuming multiple refreshes will likely happen due to impatience.
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Voice recognition is a problem with this device for three reasons.
1. there is audio input but it's through a garbage ADC - which may not be adequate for this
2. I can't seem to initialize audio in and audio out on the same I2S bus unless all the stars are aligned. This can be solved for the most part with more hardware, but I'm trying to keep the remote devices minimal.
3. i have to wake the device to accept input and I can't wake on sound
I totally misread your post. Whoops.
To err is human. Fortune favors the monsters.
modified 28-Oct-22 13:14pm.
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